On That Note: Busted Rhymes

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  1. CycloneRulzzz

    CycloneRulzzz Well-Known Member

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    Welcome back to "On That Note," CF’s weekly go-to for music exploration, hosted by @MeanDean, @cyclones500 and myself.

    This week we are looking at songs that feature bad rhyming, and forced or awkward rhymes. Please include the bad, forced or awkward rhyme with your video submission.

    @HFCS for bringing up the idea in the Beatles B side topic.


    Last Week's Topic : Where The Streets Have A Name

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    Couple from this one.
    1. Don't be fancy, just get dancy (forced)

    2. So if you're too school for cool (Awkward)

     
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    Steve Miller Band - Take the Money and Run

    billy Mack is a detective down in Texas
    You know he knows just exactly what the facts is
    He ain't gonna let those two escape justice
    He makes his livin' off of the people's taxes

     
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    In the forced rhyme category, this has to be one of the worst.

    "So Happy together,
    How is the weather?"

    But I love the song.
     
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    Life in plastic it's fantastic (bad or forced take your pick)

     
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    I know this is a bit, but seemed appropriate.

     
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    Take your pick :)

    Johnny's in the basement
    Mixing up the medicine
    I'm on the pavement
    Thinking about the government
    The man in the trench coat
    Badge out, laid off
    Says he's got a bad cough
    Wants to get it paid off
    Look out kid
    It's somethin' you did
    God knows when
    But you're doing it again
    You better duck down the alley way
    Lookin' for a new friend
    A man in the coonskin cap, in the pig pen
    Wants eleven dollar bills, you only got ten

    Maggie comes fleet foot
    Face full of black soot
    Talkin' that the heat put
    Plants in the bed but
    The phone's tapped anyway
    Maggie says that many say
    They must bust in early May
    Orders from the D.A. Look out kid
    Don't matter what you did
    Walk on your tip toes
    Don't tie no bows
    Better stay away from those
    That carry around a fire hose
    Keep a clean nose
    Watch the plain clothes
    You don't need a weather man
    To know which way the wind blows

    Oh, get sick, get well
    Hang around a ink well
    Hang bail, hard to tell
    If anything is goin' to sell
    Try hard, get barred
    Get back, write braille
    Get jailed, jump bail
    Join the army, if you fail
    Look out kid
    You're gonna get hit
    But losers, cheaters
    Six-time users
    Hang around the theaters
    Girl by the whirlpool
    Lookin' for a new fool
    Don't follow leaders, watch the parkin' meters

    Oh, get born, keep warm
    Short pants, romance
    Learn to dance, get dressed, get blessed
    Try to be a success
    Please her, please him, buy gifts
    Don't steal, don't lift
    Twenty years of schoolin'
    And they put you on the day shift
    Look out kid
    They keep it all hid
    Better jump down a manhole
    Light yourself a candle
    Don't wear sandals
    Try to avoid the scandals
    Don't want to be a bum
    You better chew gum
    The pump don't work
    'Cause the vandals took the handles
     
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  8. cyclones500

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    Low-hanging fruit and I wouldn’t look to this track for high-concept poetry, but it has at least one mega-forced rhyme. Majority of lines are basic unforced like dope/cope, cover/lover, but then:

    You kept persisting that I meet your parents
    They’re going to love my appearance

     
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  9. MeanDean

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    I don't like cities
    But I like New York
    Other places make me feel like a dork.

     
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    Sorry, but "gas" and "flash" do not rhyme. Great song, though!

    But it's all right now, in fact it's a gas
    But it's all right, I'm jumpin' jack flash
    It's a gas, gas, gas

     
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    Category: Breaking consistency

    Whimsical story with consistent rhyming throughout (Illinois/oh boy; cartwheels/high heels) but a definite sore thumb:

    “A dinosaur Victrola/Listening to Buck Owens”



    ("Sets in” and “singin’” rhyme is iffy, too, but less noticeable.)
     
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    Category: Rhyming a word with itself

    I still dig the song, but two occurrences (one of them in the chorus, so we hear it multiple times)

    It’s falling all around us
    Is this some kind of joke they’re trying to pull on us?

    also:
    The tabloid generation's lost, choking on its fear
    Used to be that's all we had to fear
    --> Either I read or dreamed the intended lyric was “choking on its BEER” -- which would be more creative.




    (At least the rhyming isn’t forced!)
     
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    [/QUOTE]
     
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    I know this is someone’s favorite song



     
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    This cut is full of playful/silly lines & rhymes -- they had the audacity to rhyme “primavera” with “Geraldo Rivera” … but tried too hard (or not hard enough) here:

    I brought her upstairs onto the roof
    I dogged your wife and she is a doofus

     
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    Doesn't quite rhyme. And how many songs have the word "moot" in them anyway?

    You know I feel so dirty when they start talking cute
    I wanna tell her that I love her but the point is probably moot

     
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    #17 Farnsworth, Jun 2, 2020
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    Forced and Lazy

    Havana, ooh na-na (ayy)
    Half of my heart is in Havana, ooh na-na
    He took me back to East Atlanta, na-na-na, ah
    All of my heart is in Havana
    There's somethin' 'bout his manners
    Havana, ooh na-na


     
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    "Being Around" is a good example -- Song has some clever couplets taken individually, but the rhyming is all over the place. Sometimes it's line by line, sometimes not; sometimes exact, sometimes forced ...
     
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    Bob stretches lyrical and rhyming limits in plenty of songs, but I can make it only about to the 4th verse of this before it becomes super-distracting...

    When someone attacks your imagination
    But nobody has any respect
    Anyway they already expect you
    To all give a check
    To tax-deductible charity organizations

    *He’s loosely rhyming “imagination” with “organizations” -- syllables don’t match; imagination and organizations, one is singular, other plural. And the tax-deductible line never seems to end.

     
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    #20 cyclones500, Jun 2, 2020
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    Good one -- although maybe it's best it doesn't rhyme, at least he didn't say "point is probably MUTE." :)
     
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